The Official Writing Challenge
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01/30/06
This is so beautiful. I lost a child and this touch a soft spot in my heart.
01/31/06
Great title! I particularily liked your ending. Excellent!
02/01/06
Beautiful story. Well done. One detail: "break in two" but minor in comparison to the wonderful message you delivered. Thanks.
02/01/06
I almost missed this beautiful story due to lack of paragraphing! Separating it into shorter paragraphs makes it "reader friendly"...and I almost passed it by; I'm glad I didn't - it was a very touching and lovely story, and nicely done!
You brought tears to my eyes!
02/06/06
This was so very beautiful, and touching. What great thoughts children have of a real Jesus. Oh, to have that child like faith. Thank you for this gift. Says alot. God bless you, littlelight
05/05/06
WOW! That is such a touching story, you are a very, very good writer. I loved this piece. I hope you post some poetry also, I would love to read it. Thanks for sharing this write,