The Official Writing Challenge
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The college lecture was a clever way to frame your thoughts about space. Work a bit on sentence structure--there are quite a few run-ons and a few fragments. Nice concluding paragraph.
I enjoyed reading your story. Agree with Jan, especially about your conclusion and ending paragraph. I also agree with your ending paragraph personally. LOL God bless ya, littlelight
Great potential, just some work needed on verb tenses, punctuation and sentence structure. (Isn't grammar a pain!) Keep writing.
I can only repeat the above comments plus add, becareful with the tense shifts. Interesting article nonetheless.
Some great advice has already been given on grammer and sentance structure - it did not distract from the intelligent use of the setting and the clear voice with which it was told. Heaps of promise. God bless.