The Official Writing Challenge
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11/10/17
What a beautiful way to share the message and hope we have in Jesus! Loved your article, Love your Lord!
Thank You1
Penny
11/10/17
Beautifully said and done!


Blessings~
11/10/17
Lovely story.
11/10/17
Wonderful testament to Jesus Christ. Your message was presented in an easy-to- understand way.

My main suggestion would be to integrate dialog into your story. Example: "What's up?" Teddy asked,as he was attempting a jump shot (Not the best example, but I hope you see what I'm getting at).
Also, you misspelled crowd (crowed).
11/11/17
Good job with the introduction and communicating the sense of aloneness with the mc. It is fun to imagine what it would be like to actually meet Jesus.
Lovely story and message. I would say keep writing, your heart is in it, just watch spelling and grammar and you will be blessed as the Lord's messenger
Congrats on 3rd Place! It was a great story and reminds us all that Jesus is with us always. I agree with all the other comments by making sure to proofread and focus on spelling and grammar, mainly punctuation and capitalization. Added you to my tracking writers and favs. ;)
11/17/17
Many times we can forget that Jesus is with us.This is awake up call to always know that Jesus is with us.keep it up.