The Official Writing Challenge
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01/13/17
Good stuff here. Thanks for sharing.

I would have started the article with "A couple of years ago ...." to get the reader interested.

Overall not bad, but it needs quite a bit of work to make it what it could be.

One other thing, many times a devotional that starts with a scripture verse loses the reader. I know it shouldn't - and the verse is so good and appropriate. Maybe you could insert it about midway through.

Keep writing - and I'll be looking for your next Challenge entry.

God bless - Trudy
01/14/17
Beautiful message with a wonderful close.
God bless~
You have written a good testimonial of your situation. It could also be used as a devotional with a little work.

You have shown the pain of the past but of satisfaction and joy in the change.

Which word did you mean- trial or trail?

I appreciate your boldness in writing about your struggles.
01/22/17
Congratulations on your 1st place in the Beginners challenge this week, Karen.

It was unfortunate that your name did not appear in the Beginner's category but did appear on the Forum boards.

Your devotional/testimony spoke to my heart. I am reading a book by Sharon Garlough Brown called "Sensible Shoes". It is a story about getting out of your comfort zone to experience God.

02/25/17
Lots of good biblical encouragement in your entry. Thanks for sharing part of your testimony and congratulations on your level win.