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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Escape (01/02/06)
Boys naturally dislike cleaning their rooms regardless of decency, annoyance, and smell. Thus, they have mothers. The mother is power in both senses, authority and force who orders and makes the boy put away his jeans. Of course, most boys will exert tremendous effort to escape mother, rather than exerting little effort to clean a room. Hence, we see another reason for a mother, to instill wisdom in a foolish child. With a patient and relentless mother, many a boy has learned that the only escape is a room with a clear floor, a fixed bed, and bulging drawers.
A problem, for the boy, comes when his mother escapes making her son clean his room. Many a women has witnessed, day after day, her husband clutter and perfume the room with dirty pants and socks. And when the destined hard times come in a marriage, the scent and sight of misplaced clothes may be the final feathers. Would that wife try to escape that husband? If so, then where will your son be and then what will he be trying to escape? Be patient and relentless while he is young, and you, your son, and your daughter-n-law will never need to know.
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Andria Cook
01/10/06
the concept works, the title is charming. Continue working on your technique to make this a smoother read.
Marilyn Schnepp 
01/12/06
Some typo's here, but Oh So very True to life!! (You might like to read "That Miserable Life-Long Task" to get another take on the "room cleaning" chore. Click on my name and find it...you'll laugh!) Very good job!
Sandra Petersen
01/15/06
Truth-filled statements that could be applied to the church as well: "Clean up your own messes and avoid giving offense to your Christian family".
Put an extra space between paragraphs.
Favorite sentences: "With a patient and relentless mother, many a boy has learned that the only escape is a room with a clear floor, a fixed bed, and bulging drawers." and " And when the destined hard times come in a marriage, the scent and sight of misplaced clothes may be the final feathers."
Short and to the point without overdoing it. Thanks for sharing this gem.
Folakemi Emem-Akpan
01/16/06
Bravo!!!!!!!! I was impressed at your intepretation of escape, and making the piece short really worked for you. If it had been much longer, few people would have had the patience to read it all. Thank God for mothers