The Official Writing Challenge
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02/19/16
You emphasized some good points here, but you need to divide it up into paragraphs to make it easier to read. Also starting in middle, about "when we read..." becomes very awkward.
I don't think eagerlessly is a word, and I think bible needs to be capitalized.
02/20/16
Paul was a tireless worker for the early church. I had difficulty reading your piece as one paragraph; you might want to break it up into shorter segments.
02/20/16
This piece had many interesting facts about Paul. I believe if you added some drama or action it would draw in the reader.

Keep writing.