The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 620 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
01/14/16
Well written devotional.It is true that most people don't follow through with their resolution because they don't have realistic goals.

The first major step is to make a commitment to Christ and stay true to Him.
01/16/16
Beautifully written and expressed...a lovely message and meaningful entry.

Well done.

God bless~
You make some great points in this essay. I think you offer some great advice and back it up with the pefect Bible verses.

Personally, I'm not a huge fan of using the second person voice in pieces like this as it feels a bit preachy to me. That's not necessarily a bad thing if that is your intention, but you could make the same points and give it a slightly different feel by switching to first person. For example: My attention became divided, my focus shifted, and my priorities inevitably changed along the way. When those things happened, I discovered I became neglectful, took things for granted, and commitments become compromised.

That is just an example to show you what I mean. For me, I feel the difference is more like a friend sharing with me. I tend to connect more. If you did that, you could change the last paragraph into a prayer. I think you have a knack for writing devotions. If you haven't submitted to FW devotions before, I'd urge you to do so. Keep reading other challenge entries and writing. I look forward to reading more of your work. I really think you have a lot of great thoughts.
Congratulations on ranking 7th in your level. The highest rankings can be found on the message boards.