The Official Writing Challenge
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You make some good points. God truly does love us and showed his love with Jesus coming to earth. It's pretty amazing.

Be careful about overusing exclamation points. Try to use them sparingly and reserve it for dialog. You also had some question marks where a period was needed and vice versa. Also when quoting the Bible, make sure you put it in quotation marks and cite the translation used.

I can feel your love for God and your desire to share that love with others. With some editing and tweaking, this would make a nice devotion. If you haven't checked out FW daily devotions, I'd urge you to do so and submit some to encourage others. Keep writing and read and comment on as many challenge entries that you can.
06/10/15
I can feel your passion about this subject - and you share some important truths. There are some grammar and punctuation issues in this piece, but overall, you make your point well. Thanks for sharing!