The Official Writing Challenge
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05/24/15
This is a beautiful poem and a wonderful message. I can't believe this is in the beginners' category. The versification is on par with the best of the poets and should be read by those in interested in writing poetry.
This is a lovely poem with a great message. You do a nice job of painting a picture with your words. I'm not an expert at rhythm, but I stumbled over some lines. I know when I write a poem, I need to tweak it a hundred times before I find it to my liking, and then another hundred with someone who's better at meter than I. In the forums, Jan's Writing Basics has been doing lessons on different rhymes. If you haven't checked it out, I'd urge you to do so. She has wonderful advice for all levels of writers. You did a great job of writing on topic. You covered a lot of ground and I've no doubt your words will resonate with all who reads them.