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12/05/05
Good title for this piece. Lots of room to expand into a personal devotional work. Think the source for the quote got missed.
12/07/05
I can see each paragraph of the last half of this piece expanded to a daily devotion.

One little typo that made me smile: galoshes, not goulashes, unless you're talking about hamburger and noodle casserole.

Nice commentary on the renewal felt in the coming of spring. I chuckled along with Jan over the misspelled galoshes (In my childhood my mother made excellent goulash, but I never wore it except in extra pounds!)
There is some proofreading needed: Your first paragraph shifts from present tense to past tense and back again; needs to stay in one tense.
Putting an extra line between paragraphs helps readers with reading the piece. Reread your quotation of Zechariah 9:9; it isn't quoted quite right. You meant 'shout', not 'should', etc.
Yes, the paragraphs of this piece would make excellent devotions.