The Official Writing Challenge
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12/06/05
This is a very tender tribute to Lilly. I was a little bit confused by the switch from 1st to 3rd person and back again. But you did a beautiful job of capturing the range of emotions associated with losing a baby.
12/07/05
This is a great story, I really like how you captured what the parents went through, and how the tree helped them with their loss. I agree about the confusion with 1st and 3rd person, and the beginning didn't seem quite right - I think what you said in the beginning was nice, but maybe have a different opener. Overall, very good, I could feel the emotions in it.
12/07/05
I too enjoyed the piece. I think we have all suffered loss and we have some reminder of that person and this story wonderfully illustrated that fact.
12/09/05
Such pain - such Hope. This could be used to start the healing in others. 'She is fine.' Precious.