The Official Writing Challenge
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01/23/15
There is no escaping your central thought, which is captured in your title. But you need to use the extra space within the word-limit to develop your flow of ideas; so you may draw in readers who need a little more convincing.
01/24/15
This piece was powerful in content and truths. Well done!

God bless~
You started out with some good ideas from the Bible and thoughts about food.

You could have had more ideas on how to control what is eaten and how much is eaten. Like: don't eat out. Don't purchase favorite foods or have someone else do the food shopping. Don't purchase snack foods.

If the food is not purchased, it can't be available to eat.
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