The Official Writing Challenge
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07/17/14
I like this. The idea of obedience as one progresses through each day and night, sharing Christ's love and spreading the light. This would make a great devotional.
07/17/14
I agree with Jody that this would make a great devotional. I love the homey feel to the language and the personal illustrations. I noticed some problems with words that sometimes are joined together and sometimes are not, like: "every one," "mountaintop," "along," "wherever." Just a matter of learning the difference, which comes with practice. Good effort.
Nice reflection on being a light in whatever situation we are placed. Something to edit: You overlooked some little words that were omitted.
07/18/14
What a warm and wonderful message this piece is. You did a fine job. Be careful to space your paragraphs. Keep up the good work.
A good life story. It demonstrates what Jesus wanted to do with us. He didn't want to take us "out of the world" but to take "the world out of us."

When we live where the Spirit wants us to live and do what the Spirit wants us to do, we are living successfully.

Again it is a good story.
07/18/14
The bible says that God made us a little lower than the angels. That doesn't mean that we can't act like them. Your story brings out the little things that we can do and be like the angels. Good Job. Take more time re-reading your story. You will catch those irritating little blips of mistakes. God Bless.
07/21/14
I really enjoyed your piece, it was entertaining and enlightening.

Good job.

God bless~
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