The Official Writing Challenge
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11/28/05
I like hearing of these type adventures! Glad yours turned out in a way that glorified the Lord. Thank you for sharing your story. God bless ya, littlelight
11/29/05
What a "gripping" tale! You held my attention from beginning to end - well done!
11/29/05
Very well written.

There are a few small things I'd change. Such as the phrase about praying to yourself. Perhaps, I said I silent prayer, or mumbled unheard words. Rather than I prayed to myself, as it gives the impression that you actually were praying to yourself as the diety, not God.

Good job on this piece!
11/30/05
WOW. nice job - obviously a true story, right? Bet you follow rules a bit closer now. What if you change the last paragraph into a conversation where the child responds to God's Love because of something you say, or that God says thru you. Like all os a sudden I started praising God in fluid spanish. The boy fell to his knees and joined in praising God when .... Maybe it's not as it happened, but ...