The Official Writing Challenge
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03/13/14
Your story was so powerfully moving and uplifting. It offers encouragement to those who are walking through valleys this very moment, and to those who have a glimmer of doubt to never despair, and for those strong in faith...to reap the rewards that are coming.

Excellent straight from your heart testimony. I'm so sorry for your incredible loss...but rejoice in the love that God has shown you through your journey.

God bless you both~
To me, it seemed there were too many "things" going on in the article.

When you plan on using several different points in your reasoning, use the words: first, second, third etc.. This allows the reader to assume the writer is going to use these to confirm his conclusion.

It is true we face trials but they should be faced joyfully. (James 1:1-7)to accomplish God's work in us.
I enjoyed reading this and thought your progress from point to point was logical and well written though I would have preferred to hear one story in greater detail. But I don't write devotionals often so don't feel qualified to really critique yours.
One small bit of red ink is to capitalize Spirit if you're talking about the Holy Spirit.
Thanks for your vulnerability.
PS
LOVED the conclusion!
I think this is a great title, it drew me in. I agree, there's a lot going on here and in my opinion, more details on just one or two of the incorporated stories, rather a little on all of them, would have made a tighter piece. All in all, well written.