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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Whine (05/23/13)
Creeping along in the TSA's serpentine line,
I dreaded the hassle but got through just fine,
Plenty of time to find the gate and board.
When will I learn to trust before I whine?

Weather rumbles across the nation
Delaying takeoff for my destination,
Hot, stuffy cabin makes me sleepy,
my neck aches from straight seat-back regulation.

Ahhh - finally in flight, in relief I recline,
Just nodding off to sleep divine
when air conditioning comes on full blast!
I shiver, awakened, and let out a whine.

Once on the ground I'm back in good form,
It's good to see colleagues and hear greetings warm
How can I whine with God's work and good company?
Oh, believe me, I can - it's kind of a norm.

Hotel windows rattle with noise 'til wee hours,
Hey, workers, there are sleepers in these old city towers!
With morning light I grumble and peek outside -
Oh my, has the sidewalk below sprouted flowers?!

A smiling shop-keeper arranges tables with roses,
Bouquets all kinds placed in welcoming poses.
They beckon to me, "Come down for a look!
We delight peoples' eyes and especially noses!"

Stopping to smell the roses was a wonderful blessing –
Put a smile on my face - that kept people guessing
what could have happened that stopped the whining?
"Just a breath of God's goodness," I laughed, confessing.

May my own comfort never be what rules my day
May I remember that any discomfort my blessings outweigh
May I seek to bless others and keep God first
Turning whine into roses along my way.
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C D Swanson 
06/01/13
You did a nice job with the topic and touched my heart with the lovely ending, and I'm sure you will touch others as well.

God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
06/03/13
This is quite lovely. I especially enjoyed the little splashes of humor here and there. The last stanza speaks volumes. No matter how bad life is, if Jesus is in our hearts, our blessings will always outweigh our pain.
lynn gipson 
06/04/13
I loved this aaba form. It is difficult to do but you pulled it off beautifully and with a very fine message to boot. We all are guilty of this type of whining. Excellent!
Allison Egley 
06/05/13
Oh, this is cute... I am slightly fearing the TSA when I fly out for the FW conference(are you going?? You should!) later this month, as it will be my first time going through with my new hip... Hope they don't frisk me TOO badly. ;)

A few of the lines didn't seem to flow with the rhythm for me, particularly this line: Stopping to smell the roses was a wonderful blessing –

Nice job over all. I like it!