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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Current Affairs (05/31/12)
No one's listening
to the cries
No one's answering
all the whys
A baby growing up
in hate
Sex and violence
Satan's bait
A father looks
the other way
"Hey, he'll be okay
someday"
Turn on the TV
close the door
Turn off minds
can't deal with more
A mother thinks
her job is done
Out the door to
have some fun
She screams at her sons
violent ways
He walks away
in a silebnt daze
Looked at with
the eyes of shame
Point the finger
shake the blame
Cuts like a knife
with words and looks
Carries a gun
along with books to school
A father asks what
he did wrong
Once again
the same old song
Then never mind
I've got to go
I've got no time
don't even want to knnow
His child screams inside with
pain
He should have know
always the same
No one's listening
to the cries
No one's answering
all the whys
Except
Jesus
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Date
C D Swanson 
06/07/12
Pertinent. Powerful. Prolific. Postively on topic. Pretty impressive.

Loved it. Thank you.

God bless~
lynn gipson 
06/07/12
I stand and applaud you.this was moving, sad and so true. You write of my most heartfelt passions, our children. God Bless you.

Terrific writing.















debra little
06/08/12
I agree with everyone that was fantastic. Words so real they just jump out at you and you can literally see life as you wrote it.... keep up the great work
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
06/08/12
WOW! I have goosebumps. You started off immediately drawing the reader in and I found myself holding my breath.

You have some tiny errors that need polishing because I think once this is polished it needs to be out where as many people as possible can read it. EX: sons violent ways should be son's or sons' violent... you have a typo with silent. The line Carries a gun along with books to school I almost think would flow better without the to school.

You also did a spectacular job of coming full circle with this stunning bit of poetry. It's a winner in my book for sure.