The Official Writing Challenge
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11/01/05
How sweet! I enjoyed reading this--the second paragraph really inspired me. God bless ya, littlelight
11/01/05
Multi levels. The first paragraph started off beautifully, then shifted to a 3rd. person abstracted narration, then the paragraph and subsequent paragraphs went back and forth. I think this is best as 2nd. person, speaking directly to Jesus, rather than distracted just use 3rd. person for the description. The final interpretation worked well, although I sit here wondering why it was inserted. Thanks for posting. blessings - dub
11/03/05
I really like the idea of a letter to Jesus. Your 2nd paragraph seemed to use more modern idioms, but overall this is a beautiful, heartfelt entry.