The Official Writing Challenge
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I liked alot good job!
This is beautiful. You grabbed me right away with the dead bugs. With that kind of detail I knew I was in for a great story and you didn't disappoint. The characters felt so real and the ending was beautiful.
A very realistic piece. The emotions the MC was feeling was evident, and was done in a way with "showing" rather than telling.

The dialogue at the end was natural and not stilted. Overall I enjoyed the storyline, and the wonderful conclusion bellowing "hope and love in Jesus'name."

Great job! Thanks.

God Bless,

I'm finding myself in so many of these stories on "Weary"..maybe that's because I spent most of my life that way before finding Jesus....this was excellent and very realistic...was it true by any chance?
Congratulations for placing 8th in level one!