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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Predicament (03/01/12)
Who took my son? I turned around for only a moment. Wasn’t it just a moment? Maybe it was longer. When I turned back, he was gone.

Yet, some form of him is still here. I can see him. His appearance. The dark, curly locks of hair framing the handsome face of a teenage boy beginning his transformation into manhood. The intelligent eyes of glorious green. Wearing his favorite sage colored T-shirt that sets them off so well. I see his shape. The tall, lanky physique that epitomizes slim. Standing there. The feet of a skateboarder, in tattered Vans, shoelaces dangling loosely on the floor.

The part of him that I can see is here. But his spirit has been snatched. His vitality. His joy for living. Seemingly, his very heart and soul, is missing. The sense of humor, stolen. The quirky smile, gone. The ramblings of excited discovery, stifled. An incredible, unquenchable curiosity, quenched. A rational, thinking, believing mind, emptied of the Truth. Or, so it seems.

Who took my son? You know and I know who took him. Satan has snatched my son. For now. For this season of sifting, perhaps. But he can’t have him. Not for keeps. You see, my son’s entire being belongs to only One, his Father in heaven who is greater than all, who is not willing for any to perish. Out of His eternal hand -- the hand that holds eternal life for those who have once accepted Truth -- no one is able to be snatched.
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Pamela Hill
03/08/12
Very well written predicament many of us find ourselves in. The resolve is based on God's truth. I love this and will be sharing it with Mom's that find themselves in this predicament right now. Thanks!
Laura Manley
03/10/12
When I first began to read this, I noticed how short it was. At the end of the Challenge entry, I felt there really was nothing more to be said and to do so would take away from the meaning behind the story. I liked your story very much.
C D Swanson 
03/10/12
Beautiful message in a brief, albeit intensely powerful entry.

This brings to mind what the "experts" say, - "writing a long story is easier than a short one."

It is oft more difficult to accomplish a story worthy of a tell with few words. However, you did it brilliantly, that is truly the mark of an "excellent and skilled writer."

I loved the whole thing. And, I have three people in mind that I will be sharing this magnificent piece with.

Thank you.

God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
03/11/12
I like this fresh take on the topic. It is something many parents relate to. Kids change into totally different critters once those hormones kick in. The opening paragraph is a great grabber.
Donna Wilcher
03/11/12
There's nothing like the heart of a mother crying out to God on behalf of their children. Short story with a huge message! Very well done.
Nancy Bucca
03/13/12
Ouch! What a constant battle to hold onto hope. I can so relate to this, and keep encouraging myself with scriptures and faith that God is indeed greater and will, if we delight ourselves in Him, give us the deepest desires of our hearts.