The Official Writing Challenge
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01/19/12
God often uses little things, odd things, to get our attention, doesn't He? Thank you for your insight.
I like your title. Like a modern day widow's mite story rebrought to life, this really speaks to the heart. Thank you for sharing this and for the reminder to not quickly judge others before we really know what's going on.
Lord help us to be less judgmental and more in tune to your Spirit so we are slower to have an opinion or gossip and quicker to offer kindness and acceptance. God bless your writing-wonderful thoughts.
01/19/12
I loved your story right from the title on. Good connection; you made a great 'modern day' story out of a timeless illustration. Good job!

You need to work on your paragraph construction a bit; but other than that, well done.
01/20/12
Nicely done! I really enjoyed this piece. God bless~
01/20/12
I agree with the need to work on your paragraphs, but I really enjoyed the story. Good luck and God bless!
01/20/12
Creative title! You did a nice job with this topic,
I love this story. So many people would snicker or feel embarrassed for the lady. But you are so correct, we don't know her circumstances. That $20 may have had to be stretched to feed hungry grandchildren for the rest if the week, or even month. It is not for us to judge.

With a little polishing, this would make an outstanding devotion. Try using shorter paragraphs when writing a shorter article. Also make sure you include which translation of the Bible when quoting verses.

This message is outstanding. I'd love to see you add a heartfelt prayer and consider submitting it to a devotional magazine. This is beautiful!
01/25/12
very nice....it warmed up as it went along. The first part was a bit description heavy but then you really got into the tale and the application. Love the title too