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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Hacker or Virus (computer) (12/15/11)
A minute ago life was sweet.
Health reigned in loved ones.
The job paid enough.
The children excelled.
The sun shone brightly.
God’s name was praised.
A minute ago.

A minute ago
There was wisdom to share -
Ready answers for questions.
Every program hummed along
Just like it should,
A minute ago.

But I blinked.
Just once.
And everything changed.

Clouds smother the sun.
The doctor wants more tests.
The company “downsizes”,
Cuts the job in half.
My son gets a D
My daughter is cut from the team.

One blink.

Answers don’t come now.
The blank blue screen
Of my life defies me.
What button can I push
To fix this?

Who hacked into my perfect world?
Who can I blame?
What horrible virus was sent my way and why?

I had protection enough:
Tithed faithfully,
Prayed daily,
Praised God
For my fine life.
I made good and sure
I was secure.
So what went wrong?
Who can I blame?
Who hacked into my perfect world?

A friend blames the devil.
Advises warfare prayer.
Offers to come over and “cleanse the house.”
Antidote for a virus.

Another smiles,
Suggests I inspect my life,
Asks about secret sin
And what I may have done
To open the door to such an attack.

Someone says it’s just my turn.
Life just happens.

Everyone has a theory.
Everyone wants to explain.

I crawl away to solitude -
Small, weary, helpless and hurt,
My Creator finds me there.

When you walk through the fire
I will be with you.

My grace is sufficient.

I get no answers.
I find no one to blame.
But I am new,
Deeper,
More abandoned,
Loved.

And Life is sweet.
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Mona Purvis
12/29/11
I really, really love this. So very well done. While, I could comment on how well written it is, the strongest element to me is the story it tells. Wow! The point you make is supreme. Splendid.

Mona
C D Swanson 
12/29/11
Brilliant and just so beautifully written. I loved this entire story, message and the clever way you utilized the topic.
It held me captive from the very first paragraph, to the very last word! Great job.
God Bless you~
Allison Egley 
12/30/11
Very good.


I liked the hope left at the end.
Michelle Meyers
12/30/11
Simply wonderful! I enjoyed your creative interpretation of the topic. It flows smoothly, and I love the ending and the reminder that when things aren't going well, returning to our faith will bring us peace again.Keep writing:)
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/01/12
This brought tears to my eyes. It really fit with my life and gave me goosebumps. The only thing I might change is the title as it kind of gives away the ending. Perhaps I Blinked or In a Minute would fit it. Outstanding job. You really tugged at my heart. This is one of my all time favorites.
Helen Carr
01/04/12
This is magnificent writing. I, too, had tears in my eyes as I read and found the hope of God in times of trials. I believe this is a wonderful example of what it is to take the week's topic and bring it to life, to speak to the reader. You achieved this exceedingly well.

Well done indeed.
Benjamin Graber
01/05/12
Beautiful! Excellent job building the progression from beginning to end.
C D Swanson 
01/05/12
Oh I am so glad this won, I loved it! Congratulations on your well deserved first place win. God Bless you~
Michele Fleming 
01/06/12
I loved this! Excellent job and congratulations!