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By Jennifer Hill
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They would chat on the phone each night, grab a coffee together and see the latest movie. They were best friends. Neither one saw anyone else of the opposite sex. All of their friends and family saw what they didn’t see. They were meant to be. How they didn’t see it was a mystery to everyone else around them.
Time went by and the friendship grew deeper. Nothing was real in their own world until the other knew about it. Plans made always included the other. Then one day Erin met someone else.
He was like no one else she had ever encountered before in all her life. He listened intently to every word she said. He was there for her even more than Jordan. He wanted to be by her side always. She fell in love with him immediately. She couldn’t believe she had been missing out on this kind of relationship for so long.
She invited him to move in and he did. He took over her life in fact. Jordan didn’t know what to think. Suddenly Erin wasn’t telling him all of her secrets. She didn’t want to see the latest movies with him anymore. Erin even asked him to join her on a date with her and this new guy in her life! This, this Jesus fellow!
“I don’t know Erin, church? Really?” Jordan asked over the phone. “They do that pretty early on Sunday, don’t they?”
“Yeah, it’s on Sunday morning. You get up that early to play football with the guys. Get up that early to join me. You’ll be amazed. I was. Trust me.”
Erin went on a little bit more, knowing Jordan’s buttons.
“For you, and only for you.” He finally answered.
“I’ll take it.” Erin happily answered back, “I’ll pick you up at 9:30.”
Jordan didn’t exactly fall in love at first hearing of Jesus. But, he was curious. This Jesus guy was fascinating. He was different. He definitely wasn’t like everyone else. Erin certainly liked him a lot. So Jordan went to church each week with Erin. He started reading the Bible she bought for him too. Then they would talk about it over coffee.
One late afternoon after meeting up at their favorite coffee shop, Erin was getting in her car, Jordan grabbed car door.
“Hey, you know what?” He said looking down at her sitting in the driver seat.
Erin looked up into Jordan’s blue eyes. Jordan was smiling, like she’d never seen him smile before.
“What?”
“I accepted Jesus to be my savior last night. I was out on my deck, the sun was setting and I was just in awe of it all. I could see Him; His love, His passion for us. I had to have Him for myself.” As Jordan shared, Erin had slipped back out of the car, never breaking eye contact as he spoke.
Tears slipped from her eyes, “I prayed you’d find him too.” She reached for Jordan and hugged him. Jordan’s arms enclosed around her and they stood there in an embrace that took them to the feet of Jesus.
Jordan pulled back first and found Erin’s green eyes. They shone with a quality he knew was hers and hers alone. He knew in his heart, what he had known for quite some time. He loved her. He had always loved her.
Jordan held her hands facing her, “Erin, I love you. I always have. You are my best friend, well, you know, my best friend right after Jesus.”
Erin smiled, her eyes sparkled with the love that shown, “I love you too, always have and always will. You know you’re my best friend. And I am so thankful we share a best friend.”
“With Him as our mutual best friend, we can’t go wrong. Marry me, Erin? Make me the most blessed man alive!”
“YES!”
Jordan leaned in and met Erin’s lips, kissing her for the first time. It was tender and sweet, filled with love, a hint of passion to come and best of all, commitment.
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In the beginning, you were doing more telling but near the end, you did a great job of showing.
Keep working on painting a picture for the reader. Your dialog was great and I enjoyed this creative love story.