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Topic: Our Mutual Friend (not about the book) (09/15/11)
As usual, Beth and Patty, were jogging on a crisp fall morning.

Beth started to stretch, "Patty, did you hear that Clair is running for Congress?"

Patty rolled her eyes, "No, I didn't, you're kidding."

Beth lifted her leg up and grabbed her foot. "Yup, she’s running, I have concerns; she doesn't handle criticism very well, at times she lashes out."

Patty plopped on the ground and thrust her leg into the air. "I share your concerns. When she was press secretary for Senator Birgdorf, she would yell at reporters when challenged on the issues."

Beth dropped her leg back down on the ground. "Do you remember when she called a reporter a moron?"

Patty got up off of the ground and faced Beth. “I remember she almost lost her job over that."

Beth sighed, "Clair would call me frequently and vent, sometimes she would be crying."

Patty smiled, "Clair does have some good points. She is passionate about the issues, and a good speaker."

"Patty, we both have known her for years. We need to pray for her. She needs to learn how do deal with stress better, and not take things so personally."

"I know Beth, I'm afraid that the media will rip her to shreds."

"Let pray now, Patty, you start."

Both women bowed their heads and held hands. "Lord, you know Clair, you have known her before she was born. Running for office is no surprise to you. Father, I don't think this is in her best interest. I think it would be better if she dropped out, but you know best. Please Lord let your will be done."

Silence filled the air, then Beth began to pray. "Dear Lord, you have given Clair this desire to run for office and change our country. We need more passionate women like her. I am worried about her stress level; I am concerned about how she deals with her anger. Please help her to handle these issues. Please help her to be a God-fearing Congresswomen that listens to you. In Jesus' name, Amen."

A peace came over their faces as they began their jog.
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
09/24/11
This is really lovely. I liked that you took a fresh approach on the topic. Politics was a great idea.

Try to make your dialog a little more natural. I have a hard time picturing someone saying I share your concerns. Something like Oh, I hear ya. or I get where you're coming from. might sound more like a conversation between friends.

You're doing a good job of working on painting a picture for the reader. I really enjoyed the contrast of the two prayers. That really gave me a peek into the two different personalities.
Linda Goergen
09/27/11
I like how the two friends had different views in their prayers, one thinking Clair should not run for office, the other saying more passionate women like here are needed in office...but though seeing it a bit different they both wanted God’s direction for their friend and had her best interest in heart as they prayed! I loved that visual! Great story, well written!
Ebony Murdoch
09/27/11
I enjoyed this story, it was focused and sincere. I like that it showed how two people can be concerned about someone and praying for them without that person even knowing. Great job!