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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: War and Peace (not about the book) (07/07/11)
“Hi mom,” I heard – or at least I thought I did!

Startled, I gasped as I turned and looked into my estranged daughter’s face for the first time in several years. Fearful that she would pull away or worse yet walk away I restrained my instinct to reach out and pull her close choosing instead to savor characteristics that had become unfamiliar.

“Hi Dani,” I managed to reply barely audibly.

Oh…oh…I can’t cry – not now. Please God help me hide my tears…help me find words to keep talking…just for a little while, I prayed. Oh my goodness…I’m talking to Danielle…I can’t believe I’m talking to my little girl again.

“You look wonderful,” I heard myself tell her.

“I’ve lost 60 pounds,” she replied.

“You look so-o good,” I reiterated.

“I just got a job working for a firm in Northport…and they are supposed to relocate to West Beach in the not too distant future… I really lucked out with that one!” she said all in one breath.

I caught myself staring at her - hanging on her every word, but managed to stammer, “th-h-a-at’s wonderful!”

“Oh I’m sorry; mom, this is my friend Laura. Laura, this is my mom.”

Another wave of tears enveloped me as I focused on Danielle’s familiar characteristics when she introduced me to her friend. Her voice was soft – not guarded and strained; her eyes were warm and smiling – not glaring and angry. Sweet memories of happy times flashed before me.

How I yearn to touch again her gentle, loving face, I reflected.

Holidays usually shared with family had become lonely times because of our estrangement. Yet, while wandering among a variety of vendors at a local Street Fair on the 4th of July I embraced a moment –a chance meeting, a moment of peace – a moment that caused us to put aside the warring silence that existed between my youngest child and me.

Is this the beginning again of the loving relationship we once enjoyed? Will this be an enduring moment of peace? Hopefully! Time will tell!
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Nancy Bucca
07/21/11
I think you developed this moment well. You can really feel the emotions tugging at the MC's heart. The only question I have is, what caused the estrangement?

Perhaps this is to be continued?