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03/05/11
Thank you for bringing awareness to the disease of Lupus.

I'm glad the MCs decided to get married anyway. You can never tell if a miracle is in the offing.
03/05/11
a touching story, the disease was consuming and time was short, i think maybe you put in a little too much background detail to the story and would have loved to hear more about the couples thoughts and feelings. there are some lovely descriptions especially the entwining of the couple like bare rooted roses. lets hope they grow and blossom !
03/10/11
I enjoyed your story. I have a friend who deals with the illness. I would've changed the ending sentence just a touch or in addition too added-they(pastors) are reminded of God's gift of love through marriage or something like that. I like how the husband to be dropped everything to marry her. I would've liked to have known if and how he was interested in her, prior to her call. Sometimes 750 words are easy to spend though:)