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This is a lovely story. It's true that a romance like that doesn't come along everyday.You did an outstanding job with the details.

I don't think you actually needed to say a love like that only comes once in a blue mom because you have already shown the reader that with the wonderful was and actions of your MC. Try double spacing between paragraphs to give the reader more white space.

Keep writing those lovely stories that can't help but to captivate the reader.
there are some lovely descriptions in this story. I would have liked you to give your characters names rather than just being "a woman" and "her daughter" and Mom etc. i think that this would have brought them even more to life
This was very well written. I agree, however that a few spaces would help the reading.
Sad, poignant story. I agree. It was a little difficult to connect to your characters because they were nameless. In most cases, the word "had" wasn't necessary. Don't forget to check for missing commas, etc.

Lots of creative, descriptive writing in the beginning, but fell short towards the end.