The Official Writing Challenge
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How sad for the family! :-( I had a little trouble figuring out how old Amanda was. She seemed a lot older in her speech, but was still young enough to be carried to bed. You did a good job showing the grief this kind of situation holds. Thank you for sharing this story with us.
This is an intense conversation to have with a little one. It was an interesting and suspenseful read.
Such a sad story! My heart broke with your two characters.

You switched from present tnese to past and back and few times, and the ellipsis between quotes isn't something that's usually seen. Perhaps that would have been a great place for characterization?

The accident hit me between the eyes, just as it did for your MC--well-crafted writing!