The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 626 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
11/29/09
I enjoyed this, and had to smile when I read that you believed your blood ran orange (as a child). :) Nice work on your entry!
I'm a little confused - was the mc at the game while the father was in ICU? However, this was very well written. You might want to try pullng in some dialogue in the future just to do some more showing instead of telling... but overall, again, very well written.