The Official Writing Challenge
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09/10/09
Such a heart wrenching story but beautiful to read.
Nicely told.

It reminds us we live in a big and broken world. But the providence of God will lead us, by the hand of his children.
09/16/09
Beautifully written story. My only advice is that if you have long paragraphs like your second one, break them up a little. Especially online it makes the reading a little easier.
09/18/09
Hi there Nicole - ek is so bly jy is hier! This is a lovely entry and well written. I think I might have broken the narrative up a bit with some dialogue, perhaps some dialogue with the siblings, or with Zubee with her mother, just something to create extra dimension.