The Official Writing Challenge
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08/28/09
Wow, wow, wow . . . this is a story rifled with rife . . . from the journey’s sour beginning to its sweet ending, the theological, psychological, and interpersonal presence of each character’s choices is numbing. You are a wonderful storyteller begging for an improvement in style, to more fully liberate your intended meanings. Hope we see more from you, often. Bryan. 27Aug09Thu.
08/29/09
Oh...what emotions, what inner turmoil, what love!
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