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08/17/05
A good story :)
What child/teen doesn't dread a long trip in the car? You described this well.I liked the way your attitude changed part-way through the story but felt the ending was a little disappointing. I would have liked to see your teen find enjoyment in another sightseeing event that wasn't already a favourite. Just a thought. Thanks for sharing.
08/22/05
I sense the dread of the same ole, same ole trip to grand-ma's. But you turned around nicely shaping it around how things change, people's attitudes change, and the addition of the seals was a pleasant change. This was a good lesson. God bless ya, littlelight