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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Light and Dark (05/21/09)
Josie was drained by her latest drama. How did life have become so morbid. How did things get so screwed up? She hissed to herself.

Mary woke bright eyed and ready for action, the world is a great place, life is good and I am a winner, she read from her placard next to her bed.

It was like a ray of sunshine was streaming on Mary's life, most said she had the Midas touch.

Josie dragged herself off the couch knowing that the day ahead had so much drama. Her friends must be wondering what dark place she's drifted into now. It must be so normal to live in this place that nobody took any notice.

Mary set up her office within walking distance so she could think whilst she walked. She knew she was going to be a success, so driven was Mary, that nothing else mattered. Success Comes first!

Josie on the other hand was about as far from success as you could imagine if you termed success along Mary's lines. She had her reasons for being morbid but there was a familiar feeling constantly creeping in, reminding her of a time well spent despite her history. Another time, much brighter.

As Mary walked and thought she couldn't help feel that something was missing from her life an all too familiar feeling. Something Deep.

Her office was furnished in modern fashions and technology and her designer outfit was sure to impress the most dignified princess. What could be missing, ha!

Mary saw an unusually sullen looking girl walk into the local church and wondered what people saw in going to church. Quite the waste of time for her. Even as Mary had this thought that funny feeling came back.

Josie was blinded by the light as she walked. It's always a stark reminder of how her life really is. She's started to prefer the rain, clouds and night sky over the Sun that hit her like a brick.

As she was stroling along with her head to the ground a verse obviously she read a long time ago kept coming into her mind. “Teach them as you want them and they will not depart...something like that. The verse had come into her mind so much recently. Maybe I ought to look it up she sighed. Problem was Josie didn't own a single bible any more. How different life was then....

Up ahead she saw the church and thought about going in to look in a bible. As she came closer the urge was stronger and realising she had nothing to lose entered. Fear and guilt gripped her before entering but immediately lifted. Looking for a place to sit she felt a strong hand guiding her and a warm voice that softly spoke to her welcoming her home. Fear Vanished!

Calm swept over her for the first time in years. She didn't realise how long she had been sitting and praying, bit like riding a bike! As she stepped outside again, her whole demeaner had lifted and she felt a peace she could not remember ever feeling.

She looked into the face of a lady with very determined appearance as she left and wondered how people got that intense.

After a hectic day, Mary started for home. All this power talk, drive, and ambition was burying her. She felt that feeling again as soon as she stopped. I'm going to be a success she admonished herself sharply!

On her way it was nearly dark and Mary noticed again a girl leaving the church, how odd to notice this, actually it was the same girl who entered the church this morning although now she looked radiant. Something nagged at her to go in and find out for herself. What a hipocrite if she did enter. For all her front she was getting to the end of her success teather and needed something more.

A strong feeling was guiding her into the church (more like a strong hand) and she decided what the heck. Isn't success about having an open mind?

As she walked into the church she knew she was meant to be here as she felt there was more light being shone on her day as she entered. Maybe even more on her life if that was possible. But it was a feeling of peace that was different. Maybe, just maybe, she thought to herself.
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Pamela Kurbat
05/30/09
I really like this story. At first it seemed that the successful girl was in the light and the depressed girl was in the dark, but then the truth of it came out. They both were in the dark apart from Christ. I like that even though they were from different worlds, their path was going in the same direction--from the darkness to the light. I think you did a good job depicting this.
Jan Ackerson
05/31/09
Good job at contrasting two people, but also showing that they were both equally lost.

Sometimes I lost track of whose story I was reading...I wonder how it would read if you did Josie's story in its entirety, and then Mary's?

I enjoyed this--a very nice read.
Lollie Hofer 
06/03/09
Loved the contract of your two main characters and how their paths crossed. Good use of this week's topic.
Linda Telisman
06/23/09
Nice job Kris. Liked the concept. I see you listened to the critique on your last submission. I can see you going a long way - you definitely have a gift.