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Topic: Light and Dark (05/21/09)
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TITLE: When Jesus Fills the space | Previous Challenge Entry
By Kathy Gronau
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Like heavy fog on sunless days
I only want to hide
Beneath the quilt that resides
For just that purpose
On my sofa
What is the hope that I should have?
You are gone.
You.
My reason for life itself.
Gone are the sweet mornings together
Your favorite meal cooked to show my love
I see nothing now that urges me to wake
I want to stay, not in the bed that we have shared
But here, beneath this quilt, in neutral space
That was my dark in those first days
And then the light which we have known began
To peak… through the fog , into my heart
Reminding me
Your beloved is now with Me
And I
I am with you still
Loving you, drawing you closely to Myself
That you may rest without remorse.
Choose to let Me in, to let Me be
The quiet strength you now will need
To walk this world, alone
Alone?
No not alone, with Me.
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I hope you chose to walk again with God. He is our hope and strength, isn't He?! Good writing.
I wonder if putting God's words, toward the end, in italics might make it more clear that the voice of the poem has shifted?
You've got some excellent phrases and images here, top notch for this (or any other) level.