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11/20/08
I love fun family traditions like this.

One thing I didn't understand...did he buy the house without his fiancee?

We used to have a statue of a gorilla posed like "The Thinker" that made the rounds every year.
11/20/08
I love this story. Your title intrigued me and I think you have a very clever husband with a great sense of humor. Kukos to you.
11/20/08
One man's junk is another's treasure - right? Fun story.
How clever your husband is! The title drew me to your story, and I'm glad I read it. The year I got my engagement ring (which I was told I wasn't going to get and I was ok with it) I got a box full of used paperbacks. I was puzzled, but my usual grateful self and said thank you. I started pulling them out and buried in there was my diamond ring.

Try adding a bit more emotion to tie your reader to your characters - show us your reaction to finding your real gift. I felt a bit let down at that point in the story. Otherwise, I truly enjoyed this. Very nice!
11/27/08
Sharon, I just wanted to let you know that you did very well in the Challenge this week. Even though you didn't quite make it into the winners' circle, you came very close, placing 6th in Level 1 (just one off the winners).

Keep up the great writing, and I'm sure you'll do very well.

If you would like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can see them here:

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?p=343147

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)