The Official Writing Challenge
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09/20/08
Great story. I thought for sure Jimmy was going to be the one to win the game.

You probably didn't need to put "the moral of the story is..." Your writing and the story itself made that clear enough.

I liked that you put a twist on the old tale of "the least likely player saves the day!" A good reminder of how we won't always do what we should.
09/20/08
smile..This could be a good children's story.