The Official Writing Challenge
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08/14/08
Exciting piece.
08/16/08
Good story. A little confusing in places. The action keeps it going. Keep writing.
08/17/08
Nice job. This was an exciting story, and well told.
Well written and very exciting. This kept me on the edge of my seat. I see real talent! Keep up the good work.
Your style of writing suspense is excellent.
08/18/08
Excellent concept and extremely entertaining. Hope to read more from you. God bless.
I liked the mobster theme and the mob names such as Piano Fingers and Vinny the Bear. This is my kind of story! You gotta problem with dat? LOL. :)
08/18/08
Very entertaining story here. Good read through and through!
08/18/08
I loved the atmosphere you created and the tension. I am not aure what happened at the end though. Loved the name Piano Fingers.
Your writing is strong on setting and mood. Congratulations on such a good entry. :)
08/20/08
A suspense-filled story...I am a bit confused with the ending, but then, this type of story always confuses me, even on TV. Well told...Keep writing. You have a way with words...Helen
Excellent dialogue and enjoyed the vivid descriptions. You certainly have a writing talent.
And this is from a beginner? You write very well. One suggestion I might offer is that many of your paragraphs start with your MC's name, Tony, especially at the beginning of the piece. I found that a bit distracting, but it really didn't take away from the fact that this is very well done. I liked the mob theme, too. Kudos, and please keep writing. I want to read more of your work.
Wow! This is so exciting. I am a huge fan of suspense and you did it well. I see a great future ahead of you, keep it up. (We need more suspense) ;)
Great dialogue and an exciting story. Good job.