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05/24/08
This was a nice story. I especially liked the part where you describe Gumbie's last hug. Very touching.
Laury
Lovely. She must have been one special cat. My daughter's cat Chloe won my heart although I am more of a doggie person.
05/24/08
My kitty lived to be 21, so I can relate to being so attached to a pet that lives with us so long. Love the sentiments described in your story and the many tales of Gumby's adventures.
05/27/08
Cute story! I love cat stories.

I wonder if you might have over-used the quotation marks. Unless you're quoting direct speech, quotation marks usually indicate that you're using irony or sarcasm, and they detract from the meaning of your sentence. Almost all of yours can be eliminated, making your piece both stronger and less cluttered.

I hope that was helpful for future entries!
Congratulations on taking 15th place in your level with this piece, Nancy!