The Official Writing Challenge
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05/09/08
Good descriptions! Isn't it funny how our relationship changes as we grow older.
It helps the reader if you put an extra space between the paragraphs.
Keep writing.
05/09/08
My family owned a restaurant and I can feel every emotion you relate in this story! Very good writing.

Spacing would make the read a bit easier.
I loved the contrast in this piece. It's so true isn't it, that what is unimportant when we are young can become so important later in life. I'm so glad the gown up family have that close bond. Thankyou for sharing this with us.
Josh I love your story
We miss you Mom
05/17/08
AWWWWW I LOVE YOU TOO!