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Haha. What a wonderful story! Very humorous. I began to get suspicion of the grandpa's intentions when I saw your description of the boy's room, but it wasn't until the end that I could confirm those suspicions.

A very smart and clever piece of writing! Thank you for putting a smile on my face today.
Now that's a wicked sense of humor Grandpa has.
I didn't become suspicious until the conversation overheard from the hall.
Allie was wonderful!
A delightful read.
Oh very clever. All the clues were there and I never saw one of them. Not the play on words, not all the pictures of Japan, and not even when your MC's mother said she had made an appointment for him to have his shots.

Good job. Sneaky, but good :- )

Very clever and creative. Loved the surprise ending, I didn't see it coming.
04/11/08
I didn't see the ending coming, either! Very clever, cute and well written, too!
04/11/08
This was great. I guessed the ending only for ONE reason. My daughter who has a tendency to create all the blonde jokes ever shared, thought YOUTH IN ASIA is what people always talking about. It puzzled her and she always made some strange remark like "I think they should have a right to live there." So I want to send her your story next week.. this is PRICELESS! Thanks for the laugh...
04/11/08
This is great. Clever, funny--an all around enjoyable piece!
04/11/08
It’s funny how differently people can interpret the same people. I noted the images of Japan and assumed that the story was therefore set there. So then I was left confused why he would be flying from JFK! An amusing tale with lots of teasing clues.
04/14/08
fantastic - loved it - nice job of leading, and then POW! cool!
04/14/08
I loved it! Very clever and comical. Being owned by 4 cats, I loved your description of Ally's fall and loss of dignity. The grandpa here seems like quite a character. Thanks for the giggle! :)
04/16/08
A very interesting story and I expected a moral discussion of euthanasia but got a grandpa who wanted to gift his grandson with a wonderful trip! Very clever play on words.
04/18/08
Congratulations, Jae, on placing 6th in your level. Great work!