The Official Writing Challenge
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02/28/08
"These women who wear only little skin skirts, and smelled of coals and old animal grease loved me as I have never been loved before."
I love this line!
This is very true if only we all had more action and less words Bravo!
02/29/08
Beautiful story. A glimpse into the life of a missionary and living in a different culture. Thanks for sharing! God bless :)
03/02/08
A good start. You have some vivid descriptions. Paragraph spacing will make this piece easier to read. Hit "preview" before you submit. Keep writing.
03/03/08
wow! What an experience! I'm not sure the title fits it, and it would help the reader if you put your thoughts into paragraphs.
You certainly showed the topic! This story gets a big **SPARKLE** from me.
I have great respect for missionaries, and I love hearing their stories. This was right on topic, and I enjoyed it very much.

I think if you split it up into paragraphs, then it would be even more effective. Thanks for sharing.
This was a good demonstration of actions of love.