The Official Writing Challenge
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01/10/08
Good allegory, and the message of "preparedness" really fits the topic.

There were some places where semicolons were incorrectly used, especially to separate an introductory clause from the rest of a sentence. A good test for the use of semicolons: the words both before and after the semicolon should be able to stand on their own as complete sentences. If they can't, some other form of punctuation (usually a comma) is required.

I like the fairy-tale quality of this entry.
I like how the manuscripts turned into a piercing sword.. a good reminder of a very important use of Scripture, to help us pierce the darkness. I like the fairy tale quality of this as well. Nice job.
01/15/08
An allegory!
I loved the descriptions and the symbolisms.
I'm not sure if it was on topic, but well written.
Keep writing.
Excellent illustration of the power the Lord gives us to stand against the enemy! The truth of His word cuts through the lies. It is very important to fix our eyes on Jesus and the freedom we have in Him. I was blessed by that reminder.

I agree about the semicolons. I too loved the fairytale aspect of the story and how Gretchen overcame the enemy and made it to the King.

Keep writing and serving God.