The Official Writing Challenge
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11/18/07
Love never fails. Love is the one thing that can melt a hardened heart. We may not see the results immediately but when the seed of love is planted it will produce a harvest. Blessings and thanks for reminding me of the power of reaching out with love to those around me whom others may simply pass by.
11/18/07
You have a good idea in this piece. The dialogue seems awkward and unnatural. Work on getting the characters to speak the way real teens talk, and that will make this story better. Keep writing.
11/22/07
I liked your story. You got the hard part down, the polish of writing comes with practice. You have great potential to reach those hard to reach people. God bless.
You tell a great story here and you show alot of potential. You just need a little polishing and that comes with practice. You're doing great, keep on writing!
11/22/07
I love how you got into this character's head. Wish I could have known why he was so bitter against Christians - but that's probably just me. You have some good advice above. Keep writing - you have a gift.