The Official Writing Challenge
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11/18/07
Your meter is perfect. You have good descriptions of the different aspects of friendship. Nice writing on this.
11/19/07
Great poem! I like the message and you wrote it very well
Love the message in the poem. Excellent!
Moriah, I hope you will find these to be constructive comments, though a poem this good needs little improvement. I think the meter would be better distributed if it read:
"They tell me not to be afraid
To lift my voice and sing."
Also, if you could think of a two-syllable synonym for "encourage", it would make this line smoother.
"they encourage me to be a friend."
I look forward to reading more of your work.
12/04/07
thank you everyone!!! :)