The Official Writing Challenge
BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN
INSTRUCTIONS
how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level
ENTRIES
submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners
Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.


TRUST JESUS TODAY

  • Share
  • how it works
  • Submit
Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Write in the ROMANCE genre (04/19/07)
On a beautiful spring morning as the budding pale green leaves strained toward new life, we strolled along the walking path by a nearby stream. We make the same trek each morning come rain or sunshine. It’s like a ritual.

With the moist and cool breezes to our backs we eventually arrived at our favorite oak and rod-iron bench. Looking out over the little pond where we find a little peace of mind, we rested for just few minutes before we headed out again.

It seemed like today was going to be just like yesterday and probably a glimpse at tomorrow. We had gone this way everyday for so many days I think we could find our way on a moonless midnight stroll, yet there seemed to something in the air today we couldn’t quite describe.

That wonderful fragrance of fresh growing bluegrass mixed with dandelions and violets nearly overwhelmed our sinuses as we rested there, holding hands like we tend to do, watching a pair of Lesser Canadian’s guide four fuzzy brown young one’s over the glassy pond. The energy of spring was almost tangible this morning; the sun was beaming and drawing new life from the earth. Every living thing seemed to be reaching toward heaven with all their strength.

We were getting a little chilly so we pulled closer to one another; I put my arm over Cherie’s shoulder and rubbed her arm to help warm her up. And we sat there for a good while just enjoying the serenity of nature in the ecstasy of spring time. Sometimes talking breaks up the connection we have with the rest of creation, and this seemed like one of those times because we didn’t say anything for the longest time.

Then, there was a lull in activity around the pond and the easterly breeze slowed to a wisp as the sun’s energy stepped up another notch. We sat back on the bench and stretched out our legs like we were getting ready to move on, but it wasn’t time yet. I looked over to see Cherie looking up to the sun with her eyes closed and smiling like she was directly connected to that life reviving source of energy.

Her face was shining as the sun’s power seemed to reflect back from somewhere close to the surface; I cold see her skin responding as she flushed with pink and rosy tones. I sat watching in amazement as the young woman I fell in love with decades ago was revealed; quietly masked behind the lines that years of hard life had added on. I was mesmerized, transfixed by this intimate glimpse of her natural beauty from deep within. Tears welled up so I could barely see as love’s memories overwhelmed me.

I didn’t know for sure, but it seemed like she knew what was happening because her smile grew and grew as the young girl in her was being drawn out; then she opened her eyes and looked straight into mine. I hadn’t seen that grin in years; it was as playful and intriguing as when we first met. She reached out and gently placed her hand on my cheek. Without saying a word, a lifetime of loving thoughts and eternal emotions passed between us. It was like her touch was the conduit between our hearts and we were reliving it all in a single moment. She let go a sensually complete little sigh and said, “Isn’t this wonderful?”

I could barely manage an answer because my heart was in my throat, I just responded, “perfect sweetheart, just perfect.”

I few minutes past when we took each others hand and strolled on down that familiar path once again, but we both had a little quicker step and our hearts were beating a little stronger that day as the Son’s Light had rekindled our love’s vision.
The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE

JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.
This article has been read 1120 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
Amy Yoder
04/27/07
This is lovely. There is nothing better than the kind of love that lasts a lifetime.
Jacquelyn Horne
04/28/07
Reliving old emotions tells a story of deep love here. Narrated perfectly. Good piece.
Brenda Buikema
04/30/07
This was a great romance story. Well written story.
Martha Helton
04/30/07
A beautifully written, descriptive piece. Romance is complete when enveloped by the beauty of God's creation.
Donna Powers
04/30/07
A perfectly romantic moment. Wow. What a beautifully descriptive story. Well done.
Loren T. Lowery
05/03/07
Beautifully written, straight from the heart. Congratulations on your EC placement! Keep writing!
Myrna Noyes
05/03/07
CONGRATULATIONS on your 3rd PLACE EC WIN!! This was a lovely story, and I especially liked the lines "Without saying a word, a lifetime of loving thoughts and eternal emotions passed between us. It was like her touch was the conduit between our hearts and we were reliving it all in a single moment." Wonderful! :)
Sharlyn Guthrie
05/04/07
This was an entry that shone (and not just the title!) when I came upon it in the process of judging last week. You did a terrific job. Congratulations!
Marilee Alvey
05/04/07
I loved the relaxed feel of this story. You did a wonderful job of description here and managed to squeeze the extraordinary out of an ordinary day, a snapshot of something positively otherworldly. That glow, that youthfulness, seemed to mysteriously appear in the framework of an ordinary day...and the contrast is spectacular! Well done!