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TITLE: Where have you been? | Previous Challenge Entry
By Duwana Brennen
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I never really considered what madness was all about. But, my mother simply stopped talking, retreating into her own self-made shell. I had handled her with contempt and disgust; I guess the teenage years are too much to bear. My unhappiness was just enough to destroy whatever hope she seemed to have left with the poison, the immorality, and the lies. My dad said it was just teenage angst, my mother collapsed into a shattered world because it was too different from the one she had created in her dreams. If you must know, I couldn’t stand to hear her praying and crying; I hated her touch as she laid hands on me on all those “just before dawn” mornings. Then she stopped; she didn’t talk anymore, smile anymore or hope anymore, and I, I didn’t care. Whatever self-destruction I had chosen, I made the choice to fall apart. But I was mad that she fell apart first and had no more time for me, not even to pray.
Why don’t I care about the fact that I don’t care about anything anymore?
Me
Every night, my soul abandoned me; I often watched my child and agonized over the young girl I used to know and know no longer.
Be careful of the glass houses you build, they shatter.
Us
Her hate is contagious.
Me (About Them)
I was jealous of all the other mothers because they had made it through to the other side of the mysterious return. You know, someone once said that aliens steal our daughters just before puberty and return them in tact even though it leaves us worse for wear. Yes, I was jealous of all the healed relationships, conversations and laughter.
I wonder what the aliens do with them while they’re gone?
Me
I miss you; I can’t speak, it’s forbidden, but I can pray without you knowing about it.
Me (About Her)
My mother was a heat-seeking missile—I think she damaged my spirit, but I’m not sure. She left her anger behind hidden deep within my mind, heart, body and soul.
“Now look what you’ve done, it’s out!”
Her hate was contagious. I couldn’t even grieve for her when she died; her twin took that from me. I got one glimpse of her nestled in the casket. I couldn’t even touch her (not like grandma).
Is this chapter closed?
You
Dear mom, I’m running away. Don’t cry; I’ll be back in a week.
Me
My daughter’s story finally unfolded—I can’t breathe. I’ll be out later; I’m collapsing deeper into the shattered world I created.
God? I can't do this without You.
HIM
I heard you—the aliens are on their way back.
Me (To You)
You’re back! But where have you been?
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