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01/12/07
This was a cute story. It really needs to be developed more. It has some great potential. Good job.
Hehe, I liked this! You made me chuckle. I sometimes crack eggs too hard, too.
01/15/07
A nice interaction and an amusing story. I hope one of them soon learns to cook. Good job.
This is so sweet! I really enjoyed the read. Good writing!
01/16/07
This is adorable, and strikes exactly the right note.

Be careful of run-on sentences.

I'll bet this is a scene that has happened in many households, in one way or another. Really cute.
Good story and well told. I think it should have a stronger ending though.
01/16/07
Very nicely done...great use of dialog, too, to move it along.
01/16/07
At least they can both laugh at their lack of cooking ability! :)

I enjoyed your story and the interaction between husband and wife. There were a few "mechanical" errors that could be taken care of with some proofreading, though.

Thanks for sharing a fun story!
Very cute story! I thought it was very engaging, but maybe fizzled a little at the end. Great dialogue keeps it moving - overall, good job!
01/16/07
Great job with the dialogue! This was definitely fun!
01/16/07
Very cute, and the dialog rang true :) good job!! :)
Cute entry with great dialogue. Watch your use of exclamation marks.

Keep writing for the Glory of Him!
A good visual of a loving couple and how they interact with each other.
01/17/07
I enjoyed this fun read. Even better is the picture of Love with this couple. Sweet!
01/17/07
Becareful with run-on sentences and by all means, limit the number of exclamation points. All in all a pretty good story.
01/17/07
A cute slice of life story. I chuckled at “Thanks…I’ve always wanted burned eggs.” The dialogue between husband and wife was very realistic.