The Official Writing Challenge
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11/09/06
I really enjoyed this. Good truth to it.
11/11/06
You've got some real gems of description in here. Great storyline too! I definitely was engrossed. Nice job.
11/13/06
This is wonderful - a full story, well told. Right on target with the topic. I hope it does well in the challenge.
The narration of the dream sequence at the beginning was a little jerky but once the doctor woke up everything flowed smoothly. A very nice piece with good dialog and good descriptions. I really liked the whole PBS thing - It worked very well!

One word of caution: The over use of hyphens, they were distracting and hindered the writing instead of helping it. You write well. Keep it up!
This was pretty good, I enjoyed reading it, pretty interesting title.
I really enjoyed this. Very good, espcially for a beginning article. It flowed well, was interesting and well written.