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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Garden (09/07/06)
Upon arrival at the pastoral counseling class low and behold my partner in crime has left a seat open for me right next to her. Class begins. I think to myself, self, he has already said this "stuff" last week. I look to my partner in crime and say, "Didn't we do this last week?" Okay, so I'm starting early. Oh look he is drawing on the board. It is a river - no he says it is the ocean and we are all in the ocean, alone, but we are all together in this ocean. And we are little boats in this ocean. As I scan my look around the classroom, I see everyone buying into this ocean routine. I think, "Am I the only one here on land?" Yes, it would appear so. So he continues on with this ocean routine for a good 15 minutes. He asks the class, "Is everyone good with this?" To which my head nods, "Absolutely not." Now mind you, I really didn't think a head nod would create such a commotion. He asks the questions again, to which my head nods "Absolutely not." His little finger raises up. Could that finger possibly be pointing toward my direction, all the way in the back of the class, last row, last seat - Why yes! All heads turn toward me. Oh my, I have done it again! He asks what seems to be the problem? I respond, "not really buying the ocean thing. I am not alone, I am not in an ocean. Not really buying your theory." A large gasp comes upon everyone. Thoughts of stoning me come to mind. He responds, it is the ocean we are all in. I respond, "I am not a fluff type person, I am a tell me the truth, in your face, what are the facts type of person." He responds, well this is for the people who need symbols to understand what I am saying. All of a sudden hands start flying up, people need to put their input on this one. Actually two other people also agree with me and the stones are now flying their way. I sit there listening to the Ocean's 11 theory, them squabbling back and forth - took the heat off me for a while - until one man looks back at me - oh no, oh no, here comes the finger. He points and says, I haven't heard from you on your opinion as to the ocean. The room comes to a hush. I respond, "I'm good with it. I am on land. You are in the ocean. I'm good."

Next week's lesson and shadow. Everyone has a shadow and sometimes it is called or could be a bag. As I gaze toward my partner in crime, I ponder. "Well is it a shadow or is a bag?"

Moral: Don't let anyone take you from your Garden, no matter who they are.
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william price
09/15/06
I liked the voice of your entry. You need a little work on structure and mechanics, but you tell a good story. Keep working. God bless.
Sandra Petersen
09/19/06
You made me laugh because the counseling session sounded like a philosophy class. (Think of a professor pointing to a chair and saying, "This is not a chair. You only think you see it. You can't prove it.") What an ordeal!

The use of present tense was perfect for this piece, and, yes, there are some mechanics type errors, but all in all your description of this moment in time was great. Thanks for sharing.