The Official Writing Challenge
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09/02/06
very nice portrayal of the life of Jesus; as the Song of God. I loved your imagery!
09/05/06
Wonderful imagery indeed. You evoke our senses and our thoughts, not settling for the mundane but pushing us higher. Very good writing.

There's a lot going on here, however, and that creates a bit of an unsettled feeling by provoking an image then moving quickly to another one.

I like your writing so much I would have enjoyed dwelling a bit longer with each thought.